BWare 0 Posted February 9, 2005 Okay... has anyone read my story, the first submission in our new Fan Fiction section? Here's a link: http://cncnz.com/features/fanfic/ If so, what did you thinK? Be honest, and don't vote if you haven't read it! If not, go read it!! It starts out slow, but stick with it! I'm looking for feedback here people :wink: Share this post Link to post
Luk3us 63 Posted February 9, 2005 Bout the Tiberian Fiend. Doesn't it seem more likey that they would mutate from something bigger like a tiger or big dog/wolf. Than a crappy little human? Part from that it was alright. Share this post Link to post
BWare 0 Posted February 9, 2005 nope. I did my research :wink:. The Tiberian Fiend mutates from a human. Think "Hulk..." Thanks for reading it through... it's all I ask! Any other thoughts? I'm nearly done with a second story (much more action-packed), set in the post-apocalyptic time after the TS Nod ending, and I want feedback from the community! Share this post Link to post
BWare 0 Posted February 9, 2005 **BUMP** OK people... ONE half-hearted review from Fenring?? Come on community, back me up here! I need feedback! EDIT: Yeah, that wasn't Fenring. It was Luk3us. I'm retarded. Share this post Link to post
Luk3us 63 Posted February 10, 2005 Fenring? Where? I see no sigh of the one that stole christmas... Share this post Link to post
BWare 0 Posted February 10, 2005 AAAHH!!! I am really sorry luk3us... I must have been reading another post or something, but I thought that you were Fenring. My bad :wink:. Oh, and what's this about Fenring stealing Christmas? Thanks for reading my story, but what else did you think? To everyone else... read it, and let me know! Share this post Link to post
Luk3us 63 Posted February 10, 2005 A likey story... :roll: My bad :wink:. Oh, and what's this about Fenring stealing Christmas? Oh nothing. I just wanted to see if he'd bite or not... Share this post Link to post
BWare 0 Posted February 10, 2005 A likey story... :roll: What the heck does that mean?? EDIT: Oh, I think I got it... was that a typo? Did you mean "likely?" If so, what did you expect from the C&C universe? It fits in pretty nicely. What would you have done differently? I'm looking for constructive criticism here dude. Short, misspelled comments don't really help me out that much :wink: RE-EDIT: AAAHH!!! Man, I tell ya... running on 3 hours of sleep is never a good thing. Were you just being sarcastic about me confusing you and Fenring? That really does make a whole lot more sense. Ugh. My apologies, once again, if that is in fact the case. Share this post Link to post
Luk3us 63 Posted February 10, 2005 Option 2. And I like to drink this really funny stuff called coffee. Works wonders... :wink: Share this post Link to post
GeneralZ 0 Posted February 10, 2005 Blaaaakk... :shock: Coffee is horrible. And addictive and bad for you. I bet you only like it with loads of sugar Drink milk and soda. Soda has caffeine, which is why people drink coffee, cause it has that stuff too. Share this post Link to post
BWare 0 Posted February 10, 2005 mmmm.... liquid sleep replacement. I love coffee, but not black. Not yet.... Anyways, luk3us, did you mean option 2 as in it's an unlikely story? If so, please expand on that! Don't be so brief with your comments! I need to know what to change or which direction to go in the future. Please people... I need feedback. Share this post Link to post
Luk3us 63 Posted February 11, 2005 I meant option 2... Has in the 2nd paragraph you wrote back up there. Don't be so brief with your comments! What are you crazy. Do you know that if I posted everything I wanted to say in one post I'd only have a third of the posts I have now.... Now how is the sensible? Don't worry I'll provide feedback over the next 6 posts. First post. When you have people having convos you usually drop a line. This makes it far easier to read, well thats what I got told in school.. :wink: Share this post Link to post
BWare 0 Posted February 11, 2005 hmm.... I think I understand now luk3us. Please be patient with me, as I am new to this art of spamming :lol:. So for your first brief response, why did you think my story was "unlikely?" The entire C&C story is pretty far-fetched as it is, so what could make my story better? I'm not totally sure what you mean by that. and GeneralZ... are you seriously suggesting SODA over coffee because it's HEALTHIER?? Do some research on that one dude :lol: Share this post Link to post
Luk3us 63 Posted February 11, 2005 Unlikey? I didn't say that bout your story. That was me being sarcastic. Hence option 2.... Share this post Link to post
BWare 0 Posted February 11, 2005 Oh, option 2 as in "good?" I thought you were talking about this post of mine: A likey story... :roll: What the heck does that mean?? EDIT: Oh, I think I got it... was that a typo? Did you mean "likely?" If so, what did you expect from the C&C universe? It fits in pretty nicely. What would you have done differently? I'm looking for constructive criticism here dude. Short, misspelled comments don't really help me out that much :wink: RE-EDIT: AAAHH!!! Man, I tell ya... running on 3 hours of sleep is never a good thing. Were you just being sarcastic about me confusing you and Fenring? That really does make a whole lot more sense. Ugh. My apologies, once again, if that is in fact the case. ..."option 2" meaning you thought it was unlikely... Share this post Link to post
GeneralZ 0 Posted February 11, 2005 i'm not saying soda's healthier than coffee, i mean its better to drink it than coffee if you're staying up nights (like me stayng up playing Renegade online to 2am). caffeine helps keep u up and all that sugar will give u some energy since soda is a lot sweeter than cofee. Sugar=instant energy, as long as u need to spend some energy, instead of sitting around. soda at night, milk in the morning for me. And i'm not getting fat from soda Share this post Link to post
BWare 0 Posted February 11, 2005 yeah, I drink soda by the gallon too. I am ADDICTED to Coke. A problem though... sugar does not equal instant energy. The carbs in soda are what give you the instant energy.. sucrose takes a long time to be broken down into usable energy... takes a couple hours I think. Oh, and by the way.. since you're posting in this thread, how about READING THE STORY?? Sorry, but I am very anxious for feedback Share this post Link to post
Luk3us 63 Posted February 14, 2005 Oh a side note aren't you meant to write up articles for this site? Share this post Link to post
BWare 0 Posted February 15, 2005 Yes I am an article writer... this is just a side project, but I have an article in the works, slated to be released any day now. School and work have been INSANE lately, and I am really sorry for the delay. My stories have been works in progress for some time, so don't let that throw you :wink:. My priorities are straight Share this post Link to post
Luk3us 63 Posted February 15, 2005 Ahh the life of the unemployed and unskilled.... Well till next week anyway... :cry: Share this post Link to post
GeneralZ 0 Posted February 15, 2005 unemployed and unskilled... what? after or right before college? Share this post Link to post
Luk3us 63 Posted February 16, 2005 Right before. I go back to tech on the 21st... So I've dropped my job in the mean time... Share this post Link to post
